save the date HELP!

[lulu66]

k, so fiance & i have almost 100% decided to have the wedding in our new california town. since everyone we know will be coming in from out of town, save the dates are a must. this afternoon i''ve been messing around with them but need some help from you creative ladies.

they are a vintage postcard of the ridge route road btwn LA and bakersfield. i replaced the former text on the front of the card with:

"Nestled in the southern foothills of the Sierra Nevada mountains on Month XX, 2010..."

then on the back i have:

"...Lulu66 & Lulu66 FI are tying the knot!
There will be lots of love, fun, food, dancing, and YOU (we hope)! So, please...

Save the Date
XX.XX.10
Kernville, California

www.weddingwebaddr.com"

i especially don''t like the second line on the back...but i do want something there that expresses the "fun, family, friend, party" mood we want at the wedding. anyone got any help for me?? please. and i''m willing to change anything about it, so suggest away.

 

[jaylex]

Date: 3/10/2010 3:51:38 PM
Author:lulu66
k, so fiance & i have almost 100% decided to have the wedding in our new california town. since everyone we know will be coming in from out of town, save the dates are a must. this afternoon i''ve been messing around with them but need some help from you creative ladies.

they are a vintage postcard of the ridge route road btwn LA and bakersfield. i replaced the former text on the front of the card with:

''Nestled in the southern foothills of the Sierra Nevada mountains on Month XX, 2010...''

then on the back i have:

''...Lulu66 & Lulu66 FI are tying the knot!
There will be lots of love, fun, food, dancing, and YOU (we hope)! So, please...

Save the Date
XX.XX.10
Kernville, California

www.weddingwebaddr.com''

i especially don''t like the second line on the back...but i do want something there that expresses the ''fun, family, friend, party'' mood we want at the wedding. anyone got any help for me?? please. and i''m willing to change anything about it, so suggest away.

How about something like
"...Lulu66 & Lulu66 FI are tying the knot!
We''d love for you to join us on our special day!
So please....
Save the date (ect..)
Formal invitation to follow"

Or
"...Lulu66 & Lulu66 FI are tying the knot!
and we''d love for you to be there!
So please....
Save the date (ect..)
Formal invitation to follow"

I think they both sound "fun" but are still kind of traditional. idk.

And I like the idea of adding "formal invitation to follow" so that they know to expect one. Otherwise, you may get some "older" family members who think that your STD is actually your invitation.. or maybe i''m just over thinking it lol.
Good luck!

 

[Rock_of_Love]

Date: 3/10/2010 3:51:38 PM
Author:lulu66
k, so fiance & i have almost 100% decided to have the wedding in our new california town. since everyone we know will be coming in from out of town, save the dates are a must. this afternoon i''ve been messing around with them but need some help from you creative ladies.

they are a vintage postcard of the ridge route road btwn LA and bakersfield. i replaced the former text on the front of the card with:

''Nestled in the southern foothills of the Sierra Nevada mountains on Month XX, 2010...''

then on the back i have:

''...Lulu66 & Lulu66 FI are tying the knot!
There will be lots of love, fun, food, dancing, and YOU (we hope)! So, please...

Save the Date
XX.XX.10
Kernville, California

www.weddingwebaddr.com''

i especially don''t like the second line on the back...but i do want something there that expresses the ''fun, family, friend, party'' mood we want at the wedding. anyone got any help for me?? please. and i''m willing to change anything about it, so suggest away.

Instead of this you could say...
"We hope you will join us for our/a celebration of love, life, firends and family!"
or
"We hope you will share in our celebration!"

And, I would add "Invitation to Follow" somewhere. Also, on another note...I prefer "...are getting married!" to "...are tying the knot." But, that is just personal preference.

 

[lulu66]

thanks jaylex & ROL...the mock up does have "invitation to follow" right above the wedding website address (i just forgot to type that--dummy!). i really like "we hope you will join us for a celebration of love, life, friends, and family!"

anymore???

as for "getting married" vs. "tying the knot"---i just thought it was a little more casual & fun. hmmm...off to think about this more.

 

[missjaxon]

Date: 3/10/2010 4:29:48 PM
Author: Rock_of_Love

Date: 3/10/2010 3:51:38 PM

Author:lulu66

k, so fiance & i have almost 100% decided to have the wedding in our new california town. since everyone we know will be coming in from out of town, save the dates are a must. this afternoon i''ve been messing around with them but need some help from you creative ladies.


they are a vintage postcard of the ridge route road btwn LA and bakersfield. i replaced the former text on the front of the card with:


''Nestled in the southern foothills of the Sierra Nevada mountains on Month XX, 2010...''


then on the back i have:


''...Lulu66 & Lulu66 FI are tying the knot!

There will be lots of love, fun, food, dancing, and YOU (we hope)! So, please...


Save the Date

XX.XX.10

Kernville, California


www.weddingwebaddr.com''


i especially don''t like the second line on the back...but i do want something there that expresses the ''fun, family, friend, party'' mood we want at the wedding. anyone got any help for me?? please. and i''m willing to change anything about it, so suggest away.

Instead of this you could say...

''We hope you will join us for our/a celebration of love, life, firends and family!''

or

''We hope you will share in our celebration!''


And, I would add ''Invitation to Follow'' somewhere. Also, on another note...I prefer ''...are getting married!'' to ''...are tying the knot.'' But, that is just personal preference.

I really love ROL''s wording and I as well prefer "are getting married" or " will be married" as opposed to "tying the knot", but it all depends on the kind of wedding you are having. If you are having a more casual wedding then perhaps "tying the knot" would fit. To me I think of a more relaxed wedding when I see or hear tying the knot.

 

[lulu66]

here''s the front of the mock up:

[any suggestions?]

 

[lulu66]

and the back:

[again, any suggestions for wording or font? i wanted it to look kind of hand written, i think.]

 

[ladypirate]

It''s really cute, but the back seems a little hard to read. Can you use a font that is still handwriting-y but a little easier to make out?

 

[sammyj]

I actually love the font you''ve used - most likely because we''ve gone with the same type of handwritten font on our paper products! I would however, suggest changing the font of ''Save the Date,'' the date and the location to something similar to the font for ''POSTCARD'' for legibility and aesthetic purposes.

I also like your change in wording...I was going to suggest throwing in the word ''merriment'' somewhere as I love the word and IMO it screams casual yet classy fun

.

 

[PumpkinPie]

what a great postcard idea - it''s so cute! I like the wording but agree that some tweaking of the fonts might help

 

[lulu66]

thanks guys! not sure if the fonts are so hard to read b/c i saved the file w/low resolution & therefore it''s really grainy or if they are just hard to read b/c it''s a handwriting font. but, either way, i''m going to tweek it & mess around a bit more. when i get the finished product i will def post on here.