Thank you letter help. I can do this for others...

[Gypsy]

But my brain keeps dying as I''m trying to write these FIVE lines for myself. It stinks. To high heaven.

Help?


Dear Mr. XXXX:

Thank you for taking the time out of your busy schedule today to talk to me about the XXXXX position at YOUR COMPANY. The dynamic evolution of the XXXXX department sounds both challenging and exciting. After speaking with you I believe that I would be a good fit for this position, offering the quick learning and adaptability needed for such a diversified position.

I felt a strong rapport with you and I look forward to further discussing both your departments needs and my skills during my on-site visit on the 19th of May.

Please feel free to contact me at anytime if further information is needed.
Thank you again for your time and consideration.
Sincerely,

Layla

 

[bling addict]

Hi Gypsy,
I had a crack at it, hope it helps.

Dear Mr X,

I appreciate the time you took out of your busy schedule today to speak with me about xxx position with your company. The dynamic evolution xxx department is undergoing sounds like a challenging and exciting time/period that I would like to be a part of. I believe that I have the necessary experience and attributes that would allow me to excel in this position and become valued member of the team.

I felt as though we had a strong rapport, and look forward to my onsite visit on.....when we can discuss how my skills may best be utilised to meet your department''s needs.

Thank you for time and consideration.

Sincerely,

Layla

 

[Delster]

Date: 4/29/2008 6:57:40 AM
Author: bling addict
Hi Gypsy,
I had a crack at it, hope it helps.

Dear Mr X,

I appreciate the time you took out of your busy schedule today to speak with me about xxx position with your company. The dynamic evolution xxx department is undergoing sounds like a challenging and exciting time/period that I would like to be a part of. I believe that I have the necessary experience and attributes that would allow me to excel in this position and become valued member of the team.

I felt as though we had a strong rapport, and look forward to my onsite visit on.....when we can discuss how my skills may best be utilised to meet your department''s needs.

Thank you for time and consideration.

Sincerely,

Layla

I like this wording!

 

[LitigatorChick]

I like the thoughts, but I think the grammar is a little off. Let''s try:

Dear Mr X,

Thank you for taking the time out of your busy schedule to speak with me about xxx position with your company. The dynamic evolution occurring in the xxx department represents a challenging and exciting development. I would like to participate in that evolution. My experience and attributes would allow me to excel in this position and become valued member of the team.

I look forward to my onsite visit on.....when we can discuss how my skills may best be utilised to meet your department''s needs.

Thank you for time and consideration.

Sincerely,

Layla

 

[Gypsy]

THANK YOU GUYS! Those are BOTH better than what I had, by far. Okay... gonna mix and match, and send this puppy off this morning. It's so funny how something you do for others is such a challenge when your personally invested. I REALLY APPRECIATE THE HELP!!


Actually, I realized I can't really do this till lunch, so if anyone wants to add anything, feel free!

 

[Elmorton]

Love Lit''s wording, I''d go with it verbatim.

 

[bling addict]

Date: 4/29/2008 11:08:42 AM
Author: Gypsy
THANK YOU GUYS! Those are BOTH better than what I had, by far. Okay... gonna mix and match, and send this puppy off this morning. It''s so funny how something you do for others is such a challenge when your personally invested. I REALLY APPRECIATE THE HELP!!



Actually, I realized I can''t really do this till lunch, so if anyone wants to add anything, feel free!

Happy to help

Good luck with your interview!

 

[Gypsy]

THank you again! I sent it off today! Done! Much appreciated.